Yahoo! Nice to see the re-write back in action. There is certainly a change and it's quite interesting. But I liked the Lopunny start from the first one. Not dissing on this one though. I look forward to seeing what you're going to do with this re-write, and wish you the best of luck making it just as good or even better than the first story.
Okay, one, I just wanted to say... it took 52 chapters to come up with an Aerodactylsmith joke?
2, I really like the way your writing style evolved. Its nice, and a lot better than the first chapter of your last one. That is, nothing was wrong with it, but this was more... mature. Ha ha. That was a horrible joke. Anyhow, can't wait for the next chapter.
Good to see your able to write again, I'd been wondering why you hadn't done anything these last few months, this was a good update, I can never think bad of a good facial so I hope to see more as the story progresses again
So... so close to breaking the fourth wall. "It was the kind of convenience I'd read in a book or see on TV, and that worried me."
I agree, Heather is a sexy name.
Now that the obvious comments are done, I just wanna say, GAWD YOU ARE A FUCKING AMAZING WRITER. If I had half your skill, I would make my own fapping material. But no, I'll content myself with reading yours, because it is probably the best porn I have ever read. Aside from a few grammar mistakes that I noticed, such as "In the face of us satisfaction though," it was perfect. I like the plot expansion in comparison to the last one, also. Overall, 5/5.
Loved the new chapter, very sexy and well planned out, I just hope that you get Adam to try his own pokemon soon, I want that caligula mindset back.
Hope this is still continuing, I'd hate to see this disappear like "Sweet Emotions"
Progress is good. You're keeping Adam to his usual way of reacting to things, including his own mind working against him. But I like the change you've made, where he's going to fuck Chikorita first, or so it appears. I hope you go that way, but I understand you have your own plot and madness to work with. Good work man.
Oh that was so sweet. Adam seems much more human now, in I'm using the correct word. Just those silly little concerns about the legality of the whole situation, the personal resvervations, ect. All in all though, this was a very kinky sex scene and it reminded me of my love for Pokemon. The end of the sex scene was just too funny. Bill, I knew he would listen in. But not Angie. I don't know why but I never suspected Angie to be listening in.
Good work. Also, love the teaser that we have to wait and find out if the old plot will be coming back or if you got a whole new work waiting in the wings. Whatever happens, I hope it will be one hell of story.
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