I like the idea and I'm curious to know where you take it, but you seemed repetative in areas. "Damn Brat" and "sneered" seemed to show up either a lot or close to each other.
Other than that, I liked it and I'll be looking for the second chapter.
I like what you've done with ya fic ^_^ poor Shuichi I feel sorry for him!, Even if my favourite character is Yuki lol Yet, I wonder what happens next? lol ^^ I wanna see chapter 2!! ^^
It's sad and really great fic! (it's strange but every time I'm reviewing something I always have to say that that's good, great, amazing etc. maybe because when I don't like something I'm just delete document in which is copied that fic and
I'm trying to forget about that, but I'm afraid that I've lost topic of the review...) I would be really glad to read ne chapters, because after first I'm very curious about the end. It will be happy end? I hope so... ;) I promise to review last chapter! See you than!
Sorry for mistakes, I'm Polish and English isn't the subject I'm the best in.
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